CWC Creative Writing Club

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CWC Creative Writing Club

A fun forum for students to add their own poetry and creative writing!


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    nightmare ( beggining )

    steelyxx
    steelyxx


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    Join date : 2009-06-03

    nightmare ( beggining ) Empty nightmare ( beggining )

    Post  steelyxx Thu Jun 04, 2009 6:37 pm

    This was it, the icy cold breeze was nipping me, this along with pure fear was making me shivver i placed one shakey foot in front of the other as i neared the big house. I heard a loud high pitch scream, then i fell, deeper and deeper into a big black hole like i was being swallowed up i shouted but no sound came out, as i fell into the nothingness that was below me.



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    Mrs P
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    Join date : 2009-05-19
    Age : 39
    Location : Stoke-On-Trent

    nightmare ( beggining ) Empty a chilling tale- fab description

    Post  Mrs P Fri Jun 05, 2009 11:03 pm

    Fantastic description Lauren. This would have been even better if you'd thrown in a few more full stops! I know you can use a range of punctuation, check your work carefully to make sure it's as good as it can be!

    well done,
    Mrs Posthill.

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