nightmare ( beggining )

This was it, the icy cold breeze was nipping me, this along with pure fear was making me shivver i placed one shakey foot in front of the other as i neared the big house. I heard a loud high pitch scream, then i fell, deeper and deeper into a big black hole like i was being swallowed up i shouted but no sound came out, as i fell into the nothingness that was below me.



xX by Lauren T Xx

Fantastic description Lauren. This would have been even better if you'd thrown in a few more full stops! I know you can use a range of punctuation, check your work carefully to make sure it's as good as it can be!

well done,
Mrs Posthill.